The Magic Sandcastle
Story and Picture by Brooke Wright


            One bright & sunny summer day Suzie went with her family to the beach. Suzie had a poodle named Gigi and she went along with the family. Suzie was six years old and her favorite thing to do at the beach was build sandcastles. Her mom had given her a new shovel and bucket and she was extremely excited about putting them to use for the first time. As soon as they arrived at the beach Suzie began building her castle. She told her mom and dad that she was going to build the biggest best sandcastle ever! She was very careful adding any little detail to try to make it look as real as possible. It was three stories high with lots of windows so you could see the beautiful ocean anywhere in the castle. After hours of working on it she was finally almost finished. All she had left to do was put the flag at the top steeple.

            When she placed the last flag on the castle fireworks burst through the sky. All of a sudden, magically, she was inside the sandcastle! Her castle was amazing! She couldn’t believe her eyes! The walls were made of the most unique and eye-catching seashells found on the beach. The floor was made of gold! The stairs were made of the most colorful rainbow she had ever seen! There was candy everywhere! Any kind of candy you could imagine!

            Then she realized there was something on her head. She reached up to take it off. It was a crown covered in hundreds of dazzling jewels! Suzie was the queen of the castle! As she wondered through the castle she looked through the windows at the beach. The water was sparkling so much it looked like the waves had diamonds in them!

            As she rounded the hall she saw a magnificent unicorn. Then she realized that the unicorn was wearing a collar. It was Gigi’s collar! Gigi had turned into a unicorn! She could take Suzie anywhere she wanted to go.

            In the top room of the castle there was a button on the wall with a sign beside it. The sign read, “This is your magical kingdom. If you stay past midnight then it is yours forever. If you would like to return home the press the button.”

            Suzie wanted to stay in the castle forever but she missed her family. It wasn’t as exciting without them there to share it with her. She knew that it would be so lonely without her mom, dad, and brother around. Also, she knew her parents would be worried about her. She knew all the riches the castle offered couldn’t replace her family. So, she looked through the castle one last time and then she pushed the button.

            Suzie found herself lying out on the beach beside her mom. To Suzie’s mom, it appeared that Suzie had just woken up from a dream. However, Suzie knew otherwise. Gigi ran over and gave Suzie lots of big wet kisses. They had not been dreaming, they had been exploring Suzie’s magic sandcastle! Suzie knew that no one would ever believe her story so she kept it to herself. The magic sandcastle was the adventure only her and Gigi knew about!

Activity for Lesson Using Critical Thinking

After sharing your creative writing story with your students, have your students use their critical thinking skills to answer the following questions to write or dictate their story. After writing their stories, have the students draw a picture using the Paint program to illustrate their story.

Critical Thinking questions to ask students that would change your story to their story:
1. How would you change the main character? (Introduction)
2. Where would your story take place? (Setting)
3. What would happen to the main character in your story? (Plot)
4. How would your story end? (Ending)

Lexie's pictureChase's picture
Picture by Lexie                                 Picture by Chase
Lexie said that her main                     Chase said that his main character 
character would have been                 would've been a boy named Charlie.
a little girl named Raleigh. Her            It would've been on the beach.
story would've taken place in a           He would've saved a little boy from
playground or a park. She                   drowning. At the end everyone would
would've built a sandcastle and           go swimming. He drew Charlie at the
her dog would've jumped in it,            beach. He drew the boy, the ocean, the
messing it up. The next day                 sand, the sky, and clouds.
when she went back to the park
the castle would still be there. She
drew a picture of Raleigh, her
black puppy, the sand box & the
sand castle.

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